Not bad
+length
+story
+neat, tidy and credited
-This is obviously written for people who already know The Legend of Zelda. You would do better for outsiders like me if you gave us a bit of introduction.
If the story is based on Ocarina of Time, the sounds come from OoT and the Sprites come from OoT, then what part is yours- is there anything in it which is actually original?
If you take a look at MEKoftheMEKKingdom's work you will see what I mean.
For example- He takes images and traces them into Flash. then he can zoom in and see a real picture, instead of pixelated scribble.
the trouble with sprites is that they alway look tiny or pixelated.
Like I said, its not bad, but there just is a limit to the credit I could give you for this work.
Two small errors in the text: Thou hast returned; Thy slumber
Best Wishes, Ice