Good
+Art and animation fine
+Funny enough
-Sound levels need balancing- the volume of the sounds is a lttle too high compared to the talking, which is hard to hear.
-Lip sync would be good- the next step
+Proper credits
Good
+Art and animation fine
+Funny enough
-Sound levels need balancing- the volume of the sounds is a lttle too high compared to the talking, which is hard to hear.
-Lip sync would be good- the next step
+Proper credits
Thank you very much for the fair review. I will agree that the sound could have been balanced if I had the time; same goes for lip-sync.
Very Good
Does it have Flash in it as a significant part of what it is? YES
Therefore I say it bleongs here. You are in a difficult place because Tom has Front Paged and supported non-flash entries, of which NN is just one of many, but some people, such as myself are not keen on non-flash. However, I have no doubt that Flash it belongs here.
- I think the "victim" escaped the line on his leg a bit too easily.
-the running was so-so, it looked like what it was, running on the spot. Shooting it on a gym treadmill might have helped. In the second section of running it really had to become a sprint.
The animation running could have been improved, its better than anything I could do but not great.
Its an entertaining idea- Ive seen animations come out and humans go in, but I haven't seen them swap before. I would like to see what happens to the mean bloke next. I liked the should crack thing, which helped to connect the animation with the man at the end. A chunkier actor would have helped to look like the cartoon.
All in all, these are just details, its good, best of luck in the competition.
Haha I agree the running could definitely use some improvement. Had I not been an idiot and gotten my haircut, I would've definitely refilmed that with a treadmill or something along those lines. I just wasn't too keen on having shag hair for my grad photos.. but I digress ;P Thanks for the review!
Yeah!
+ Message. I agree that sometime Flash just doesn't do what it is supposed to. Maybe a lot of the time its me, but no, not always. Sound is my great bugbear. It just doesn't work properly!
+ sound good and clear.
+ Lip sync good, otherwise lackign in animation. The odd movement of the rest of your face would make all the difference- a blink, a smile- anything.
Art Ok, but limited
Otherwise its a bit simple and crude
Thanks it was my first time lip synching. I'll try to make a good actual cartoon next time. Good luck on your sound troubles lol
could be better
+ so-so music
- no real art
-no real animation
- rude and offensive to an OK crew
-not funny
-huge filesize for no entertainment value.
-no originality
This gives no encouragement to join the Eggs whatsoever.
taking these basic abilities- animation, sound, art, background etc. you should be able to create something with interest, length, originality etc.
I hope you will reconsider and try creating something interesting and original in the way of a Crew, that I could support.
EGG LEGION FTW!!! SOUP SQUAD SUCK!!!
V Good
I enjoyed it.
+ Though at first, the echoey/studio voices seemed silly, I got into them- part of the humour.
+ Funny and different
+ Some good art and fun animation
+ Good detail- esp ladybird
"ne-ergh we were here first!"
- needs proper end/credits, even if its just "I did everything"
To compensate for no credits, I'll supply them here!
Directed by Max van Mesdag
Produced by Max van Mesdag
Written by Max van Mesdag
Storyboards by Max van Mesdag
Animated by Max van Mesdag
Adapted for the Screen by Max van Mesdag
Lighting by Max van Mesdag
Casting by Max van Mesdag
Pyrotechnics by Max van Mesdag
Animal Handling by Max van Mesdag
Cooking by Max van Mesdag
Chemical Testing by Max van Mesdag
Stoe - Max van Mesdag
Guard 1 - Max van Mesdag
Guard 2 - Max van Mesdag
King - Max van Mesdag
Goblin 1 - Max van Mesdag
Goblin 2 - Max van Mesdag
Bandit - Max van Mesdag
Happy?
Make the link!
+ good sound, music, voice
+funnier than the original, which TBH was a bit pointless, this being a mildly amusing parody of the first.
+ loved the chopped helicopter
- Still not that much to it, I mean why is a mock advert supposed to be entertaining?
- Missing a LINK to the first one, which is essential to making this worth watching
Mock advertisements are always fun...well at least for the guy selling the mock product.
great music
+ Lively and catchy. I could imagine using this music in other Flash.
the basic art and idea is good and had potential
- Not much too it, when it comes to animation and action. You have those coloured power displays on the front that could and should go up and down. You have a character that should be funky and is completley still. You have speakers that should pulse with beat and don't. It all just stops while the beat goes on. If you were to come back next year and build this into a really good submission, I would look forward to it, but right now it has no replay value as a video IMO.
I completly agree with you. Next year i'll do my best ;)
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