IceDragon64's game Reviews on Newgrounds

[Madness Exploration]

harmless enough

Nothing to get worked up about. Looked good. I can take a joke. Hope you might make the game one day! I like the end music
I don't understand the text at the end- is that even english?

pancakes-bat responds:

or poorly written just to show that it was a joke

[Frenchy Fist Fight]

borderline

Its scribbly, crude and doesn't do very much, but it does work and with a choice of different fighters, a touch of humour and some variety in the kill, its not too bad.
If the enemy could fight back at all I would rate it as a proper game, but its not exactly a challenge.

VioletVulpine responds:

There's a song called Borderline too.

[DBZ goku dress up game]

Its OK

It looks OK, and the dressp part works OK, but I don't know DBZ. It might have been nice to have a little text/intro for those of us who don't know DBZ. A simple, stylish intro as to who Goku is and maybe the significance of these styles of clothes would have been nice and would certainly have got a higher score from me.

The restart button works OK, but the Black and White just restarted- these things should be checked over and again before submission.

The Enter button would be better labelled Start and the hit area should be the whole button- at present if you actually put the mouse over the word Enter nothing happens.

salcha00 responds:

I fixed the backgroudn button, and the restart one.
I used ActionScript 2 and for some reason I can't put text as a button, that is why my buttons are so big, and when you click on the text nothing happends. I will try actionscript 3 next time.

[Dress Up LC Vivian V.1]

good

Dressups are very common here and I tolerate most working dressups that are not desperately basic. However, this is the next class up- it looks good and has a fair range of good-looking items. Nice options and smooth eye animation. Reminds me very much of 20,109,600,000 Pin-ups , which I assume inspired you.
You might make the buttons just a tad larger; you might have options on the background based on her story; you might make items for her to hold etc- again based on her story, which might create interest in her as a character.
I like Black Magic Woman and it seems a very apt style for a sexy woman dressup, but you might consider music options; maybe you could choose other items which move. Contact me if you feel like talking to someone about future work on this.

LordArashi888 responds:

As it says, its version 1. I will add more music, a background changer, more music, more clothes, more accessories, special outfits... And more poses! So I'll notify you when I do that! Thanks for the review! You're awesome, buddy!

[The Persian Quiz]

Good

Technically correct with clean, tidy, well-written text. As quizmaker myself I know what goes into making one of these and whilst there is virtually nothing you could call animation in it, getting every route of every button, along with every word right is hard.

It could be much improved with better graphics. It would not be that difficult to add some correctly credited photos; something more interesting at the level changes; a bit of animation; more 'reward' for winning.
Should you decide to work on this at all, get in touch and I will help you. Take a look at my art tutorial if you want some basic ideas for livening things up.

thank you for teaching me something about these people and Zoroastrianism. They certainly put other ideas of empire to shame.

quanmandetil responds:

Hey thanks for actually playing it! This is my second actual quiz game, but my first was really messy and unprofessional, so I am never going to submit it.
Yes, I know it would be better if I put some more animation into it, but I had to get this finished for a school project, so it was kind of minimalistic on the artwork.
I'll be sure to check out your tutorial! Thanks.

[oh child]

very basic

but just about passable- its a game that works Try not to submit stuff you know is poor- push yourself to make it as good as you can.

Art, writing, animation, everything- just one example- the scribbly numbers were so poor it looked like there was no 8 only 6's!

Take a look at my Art Inspiration Tut if you want to take some basic steps forward.

Always put in a credits page

darkmagewizard3 responds:

Yeah...sorry about my handwriting.

As for credits-it was just me and I credited the song I used on the side.

Thanks for the feedback.

[Pic a Pic Jigsaw Puzzle]

im Clicking Here...

...and nothing is happening?

cybus10 responds:

I apologize for the errors. This is my first game and I had some trouble with the ads because I built it in flex instead of flash so I had to make the ads work in flex.

[NG Flagging Guide 2]

useful!

I think this about covers it all. I think we might put a link into our info flash to here as your review of flagging is slightly more detailed than ours.

It is all readable enough, I suppose, but it could do with a bit of proof reading. Good copy editing adds confidence to the reader of textbook material.

If you would like me to go through it some time with a view to improving such things as spelling etc. let me know.

Little-Rena responds:

I try to include as much as I can, but being just one person, I miss things.

[Dress Up Your Flash]

What a fun idea

Lots of fun, amusing twist to the overdone dressup idea. Nice big screen to put them on. Well drawn items and background. Good music.
Please do work on this, it could go far:
1. Music off button
2. Alternative music button (though theres nothing wrong with this music)
3. Click to another screen with alternatives eg a Clock Screen with relevant backgrounds and lots more clock refs OR a screen looking like the Flash is going into the Portal, with other flashes around it.

GroggyLobster responds:

Thanks!! The idea of the alternative background with other flashes around is perfect! (Why haven't I thought about this before...?)

[Newgrounds Helpful Guide]

Excellant!

This is a useful and inspiring Thingy. Would you like to link to our Experts Guide, which would compliment yours very well? Take a look if you don't know it-
newgrounds.com/portal/view/387389,

Then contact Highwatermark, who is the senior author. I would like to see a big 2-way link between our projects, to our mutual benefit.

Your thing has a few tiny errors, if you would like me to proof read it and send you a list, let me know.

Sispri responds:

Ah, I'll check it. Hmm, if they're grammatical, it really won't make a difference. Eh. Thanks though. :)