IceDragon64's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Spawnmaster Ep 1]

Its very good.

but it need quite a bit of improvement to make it great.

You have clearly put in a lot of effort and it certainly has length. there are some nice touches including some little bits of huour and some bits and pieces of thought and story and some nice sounds.

However, its nearly all one long fight scen without any explanation or introduction. Who is this Spawnmaster? why is he running and jumping down the hole? You have to make this kind of story happen in order to make people CARE what happens to him. It is the quiet moments and the thoughts and the bright times which make the adventure seem exciting and important in contrast.

Also, having spent, I am sure, SO much time putting this good show together you really should have got someone who is good at English to read it through- someone who was NOT involved in the project who can see it objectively.

As for the credits, you need to put some into the notes right NOW, then edit the some of the boring, repetative action scenes a bit. All you need is one button on the end frame directing you to one single frame of static credits, for now at least. You may as well improve your interactivity by making a little menu at the end and including Scene Select, a one frame story background and a simple, one frame glimpse of the future in text- just a summary of how many episodes you plan, when you plan to have an alpha out of the next one etc.
For someone of your abilities, this is all very easy, surely?

Don't zoom in to a closeup of a pixelated sprite, it looks awful. Only zoom in if you are prepared to put in some detail to zoom into.
This story has SO much potential, take whatever time you need and ask for whatever help you need- its already so good you should get it.
Best Wishes,
IceDragon64 of the Dragons and Spirits

dark-phantom1 responds:

well very thanks for the time taken to write this review, yeah in ep 2 i will put the history of spawnmaster and you will see, and I'm not english.....lol

[Burnt Toast Man: Hot Date]

Yay! Do more!

Nice stuff. He is, of course NOT burnt toast man UNTIL he goes on the date, but never mind us pedants!

No, seriously. It has a light touch to the humour although its really very black watching poor Clarence and his parten burn to death.

I like the Herb Alpert revival!

[Revenge of the Kongs]

Very interesting

Its like the stories they put at the begiining of games, only expressed as they would LIKE to express them.
It definately had some story to it unlike so much here.

I don't know much about sprites and nearly didnt watch it cos its a sprite movie. I was very surpried that you have made them all yourself.

I think you told us it whose studios it came from too many times, but apart from that it was good stuff.

[Valentine's Day Dreamer]

Looked good

Niceatmosphere. I assume the strange black face is some kind of anime convention? Surely it was a bit dark, just the same?

i think it needs to end and replay buttonrahter than loop.

Best of luck- you may need it cos you told everyone its your first flash and the statwhores may blam it without looking at it.
No, really its good work.

[Freefall boarding]

stickmen skateboard is common on NG...

... but this one is OK. It sounds good and its neat enough. Nothing wrong with it.

ZeroJ responds:

its OK yay thank you dude !

[Chocolate]

In my oppinion...

a flash joke should only be as long is its humour can support it.

A quickie joke should be- load quick and hit the punchline quick.
So, its length is fine for a small joke. There's nothing great about it, no great art, no background etc, just semistick men, but who cares, its just a quickie joke!

Its got credits, its got humour, its got sound and good, simple voice acting, simple but OK lip movement- thats OK!

[Blueprint from the Beyond]

Very Good.

All looked and sounded just fine. I wouldn't change it. Can't think of anything to say!

[Rube Goldberg Machines 3]

Improved

Hello, its me again!

In addition to the things I have said about your previous versions:

1. This is not really a series, its updated versions of the same thing.
2. I like the glint on the knife

3. Shading on the funnel would look good.

4. You have a glitch right at the end. Your new picture of all the objects disappears, then reapears for a flashing moment.

5. The new intro is quite good, if a little fast, but although you have defined a Rube Goldberg machine it still begs the question, who is Rube Goldberg or how does this type of machine get its name.
6. The text at the end rolls too fast- of course YOU can read it, you already know what it says. Always get others who HAVEn't been involved to see your movies before you show the world.
7. A heavy sound of the big bowling ball rolling would be good.

8. A different image for the smaller ball would make more sense.

Its good, its getting better, but you can still improve.
Best Wishes,
Ice